Band 9 Essays: Agree or Disagree – Extreme Sports

TOPIC – Some people believe that extreme sports should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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SAMPLE ANSWER –

Extreme sports, by their nature, can lead to serious injury or even death. However, despite the risks that they contain, people should certainly not be prohibited from participating in them.

The main problem with banning extreme sports is that all sports possess a level of risk. Anyone who has participated in a sport has probably experienced or seen some kind of injury. Even in ‘safe’ sports, like tennis or badminton, players can experience serious injuries that require surgery and may lead to life long problems. Of course, no one seriously talks about banning these sports. If a person knows the dangers and takes suitable precautions, they should be free to enjoy whatever sport they like.

This leads to the next point, which is how do we decide what sports should be banned? If a skydiver’s parachute fails to open then they will almost certainly die, but fewer skydiving has fewer deaths than American football, so should we ban that sport? Again the main point is that safety should come first, and it is problematic to try and work out which sports are ‘dangerous’ and which are ‘safe’, or safe enough.

Of course, sports that lead to almost certain death or that endanger the lives of people who are not taking part should not be tolerated, but this is a general rule for all of life and society. The fact is that no extreme sports are that dangerous and people who take part in them are aware of the risks and are prepared to accept them in order to experience the excitement of living life on the edge. If these people did not have a way to express this desire, they would find another way whether it was legal or not.

Generally speaking, something should only be banned if there is a compelling reason. In the case of extreme sports, it is too difficult to say what is extreme and what is safe, so it is much better to allow people to make informed decisions about what activities they wish to take part in. (343 words)

COMMENTS –

  1. Aim for 4-5 paragraphs. Introduction, 2-3 body paragraphs, a conclusion.
  2. Your introduction should introduce the topic. In this example, the topic is “extreme sports”)
  3. Clearly show your view. In this example, the view is “certainly not [be banned]”.
  4. Try to include some synonyms from the topic. In this example, the word “banned” has been changed to “prohibited”. You can also changed the grammatical structure from “banned” to “banning” or “ban” (noun).
  5. Each body paragraph should have ONE clear main idea. In this example, the first body paragraph is about “all sports are risky”, while the second one is “how do we decide what sports to ban?”
  6. If you have time, try to include a counter-argument paragraph. This is a way to show you have though about the opposing view. You don’t have to agree with this view. In fact, you can explain it, then explain why you don’t agree with it. In this example, the counter-argument is about banning some sports that are so dangerous there is a very high chance of dying or hurting someone who is not involved.
  7. In your conclusion, try to clearly restate your view and maybe summarize the reasons you have given. Remember to use synonyms so you don’t repeat yourself!

 

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