Band 9 Reports: Pie Charts Pt.1 – Different Diets

The pie charts show the different foods included in diets in China, India, and the average around the world. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main details.

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The pie charts provide a comparison of what makes up the diets of people in China, India, and the world in general. The diets included in the charts are made up of processed food, vegetables and fruits, animal sources, and nuts and seeds.

A brief assessment of the charts reveals some similarities and differences between the diets of Chinese, Indians, and the world as a whole.

One standout point is that about a quarter of the Indian and global diet consists of animal products, while in the Chinese diet this figure is only around one-sixth. Similarly, about 40 percent of the diets of India and the world altogether come from processed foods, whereas in China this figure is slightly lower at around one-third.

In contrast, Chinese people eat almost twice the amount (19%) of nuts and seeds that Indians do (11%). Strikingly, the global population’s diet only contains a minimal 4% of nuts and seeds. Moreover, 32 percent of a typical Chinese diet is comprised of vegetables and fruits, which is 3 percent higher than the world average and 9 percent greater than in a normal Indian diet.

Overall, it seems that Chinese tend to eat a more plant-based diet, while Indians and the world in general tend to eat more meat and manufactured foods. (208 words)

COMMENTS –

  1. In your introduction, try to include some synonyms. For pie charts, you need to compare the different charts, so a phrase like “provide a comparison” is a good substitute for “show”. Also try to include the different categories if you can so the reader knows what your are comparing. In this example, the categories are “processed foods”, “vegetables and fruits”, “animal foods”, and “nuts and seeds”.
  2. Be careful when using synonyms for the different categories. It may make your answer unclear. For example, you do NOT need to use synonyms for things like “nuts and seeds” or “vegetables and fruits”. However, in this example, “animal foods” has been changed to “animal sources” and “animal products”. Remember that your first priority is to be CLEAR.
  3. Give an overview of what the charts show. With pie charts, it is often difficult to give a brief overview as there is lots of information to compare (instead of in something like a line graph where the overall trends are normally quite clear). Therefore, you can just give a general overview that there are “some similarities and differences between the charts”.
  4. Normally the pie charts will have some SIMILARITIES and DIFFERENCES to compare. Use these to organise your answer. In this example, one body paragraph is for the similarities and one is for the differences.
  5. Link you paragraphs with appropriate transition words or phrases. In this example, the first paragraph is about similarities and the second one is about differences, so the phrase “In contrast” has been used.
  6. Pie charts are all about COMPARING, so it is VERY important that your details involve comparisons. Use phrases like “two times higher than”, “about the same as” “slightly lower than”, “greater than”, “similar to”, “about the same as”, etc. to make your answer more interesting, easier to read, and also boost your vocabulary and grammar score.
  7. In your conclusion, try to think of ONE overall point to make. In this example, it seems that Chinese people eat a more vegetarian diet, while the others eat more meat. “Vegetables and fruits” and “nuts and seeds” have been combined into the term “plant-based”.

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