Band 9 Reports: Pie Charts – Energy Production

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The pie charts above show a comparison of kinds of energy production in a European country in 1995 and 2005.

PLAN –

  1. Paraphrase the given sentence to make your introduction. Do NOT copy it.
  2. Identify the main points and use these to write your overview. Remember the overview is a MUST to get above a band score of 5. Normally you can write about the obvious similarities and differences between the two charts or about the biggest and smallest sectors.
  3. Compare the two charts using a range of vocabulary.
  4. Try to organise your body in a clear way. A good way to do this is to compare biggest to biggest then smallest to smallest OR similarities to similarities and differences to differences. In this example, you are comparing the changes between two different times, so you should write about what changed and what stayed the same.

 

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INTRODUCTION –

Paraphrase the following. Words you can paraphrase are in bold.

The pie charts above show a comparison of kinds of energy production in a European country in 1995 and 2005.

Sample – “The pie charts compare the changes in the ways that energy was generated in a country in Europe between 1995 and 2005.”

OVERVIEW –

Look for the biggest, smallest, similarities and differences. We can see that gas and coal were the biggest in both years and were largely unchanged. Petroleum was at about the same level as oil and gas in 1995 but had decreased significantly by 2005, while nuclear and other increased.

Sample – “In both years, gas and oil were the major sources of energy. Moreover, the use of nuclear and other energy sources rose, while the use of petroleum,which had been comparable to gas and coal in 1995, fell sharply.”

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BODY –

  1. Your body paragraphs are to make your overview clearer. Use some specific data from the charts to show what you have stated in your overview.
  2. Try to write two paragraphs with clear organisation. In this example, we can have one paragraph for the biggest ones (gas, coal, and petroleum) and we can compare how they changed by 2005 (two the same, one less). Then we can have another paragraph for the rest.

Sample – “In 1995, coal and gas accounted for almost the same amount of energy production at 29.80% and 29.63% respectively. By 2005, the figures for both had increased very slightly to 30.93% for coal and 30.31% for gas. Furthermore, although petroleum was used at approximately the same amount as oil and gas in 1995 (29.27%), its use had fallen considerably to just under one-fifth of total energy production by 2005.

On the other hand, the use of nuclear power climbed substantially from 6.40% to just over 10%. Similarly, the use of other energy sources also saw noticeable growth, rising from 4.90% to 9.10%” (161 words)

GENERAL POINTS –

  1. Use a range of vocabulary (try to avoid repetition). Look at the words in bold for examples.
  2. Try to use different grammatical structures. In this example, simple past and past perfect tense is used. Also, try to mix verb-adverb with adjective-noun e.g. “climbed substantially” vs. “noticeable growth”.
  3. Link your different points with a range of appropriate vocabulary. In this example, “Moreover…”, “On the other hand…”, “Similarly…”, and “By 2005…” are used.
  4. Try to use some appropriate pie chart vocabulary like “accounted for” (or “made up”, “comprised” etc.)

FULL ANSWER –

The pie charts compare the changes in the ways that energy was generated in a country in Europe between 1995 and 2005.

In both years, gas and oil were the major sources of energy. Moreover, the use of nuclear and other energy sources rose, while the use of petroleum, which had been comparable to gas and coal in 1995, fell sharply.

In 1995, coal and gas accounted for almost the same amount of energy production at 29.80% and 29.63% respectively. By 2005, the figures for both had increased very slightly to 30.93% for coal and 30.31% for gas. Furthermore, although petroleum was used at approximately the same amount as oil and gas in 1995 (29.27%), its use had fallen considerably to just under one-fifth of total energy production by 2005.

On the other hand, the use of nuclear power climbed substantially from 6.40% to just over 10%. Similarly, the use of other energy sources also saw noticeable growth, rising from 4.90% to 9.10%

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