Band 9 Essays: Opinion – Globalization

As mass communication continues to grow, the world is becoming more globalized. Some people believe that this will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

FOUR-Paragraph Structure

  1. Introduction
    1. Paraphrase the topic
    2. State your opinion (“to what extent”)
  2. Body Paragraph 1
    1. Main supporting idea 1
    2. Explain
    3. Specific example or further explanation
  3. Body Paragraph 2
    1. Main supporting idea 2 (link from BP1)
    2. Explain
    3. Specific example or further analysis (remember to include at least one example per essay)
  4. Conclusion
    1. Summarize your opinion and the reasons
    2. Memorable final statement supporting your view

globalisation

As mass communication continues to grow, the world is becoming more globalized. Some people believe that this will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

SYNONYMS

Mass communication = the ability to instantly communicate

Globalized = globalisation; the phenomenon of globalisation; inter-connected

Inevitably = unavoidably; will certainly become; is undoubtedly going to happen

Loss of cultural identity = cultural destruction; irreversibly damage culture

 

THINKING OF IDEAS

Two body paragraphs = two supporting ideas. In this example, the supporting ideas are:

(1) people enjoy things from different cultures (and globalisation makes it easier to access these things)

(2) Different cultures influence the global culture rather than being destroyed by it.

Remember that your job is to answer the reader’s questions. E.g. “What do people enjoy about different cultures?” “How globalisation help to make cultures stronger?” “How do different cultures influence global trends?” etc.

globalisation-1

 

 

SENTENCE-BY SENTENCE

  1. INTRODUCTION

Introduction

  1. Paraphrase the topic

“The ability to instantly communicate on a global scale has led to the phenomenon of globalisation where the world is becoming more inter-connected.”

  1. State your opinion (“to what extent”)

“While it is often claimed that this will unavoidably lead to the destruction of some cultures, I believe that this is not entirely true.”

NOTE – The writer’s opinion is “disagree” BUT not “totally disagree”. The question asks “to what extent”, so your opinion can be anywhere from “totally agree” to “totally disagree”. Just make sure your supporting ideas MATCH your opinion.

 

2. BODY PARAGRAPH 1

  1. Main supporting idea 1

“People crave new experiences, so instead of destroying culture, the opening of the world makes the richness of different cultures more available for people to explore.

2. Explain

“It is only necessary to visit the central business district of a large city to see the wide range of restaurants serving different ethnic foods from all over the world to understand that different cultures have an important place in the world.”

3. Specific example or further explanation

“While culture is about more than food, and food is often changed from how it is in the traditional culture when it is transported to a new part of the world, it shows that globalisation can help aspects of different cultures to thrive rather than perish.

NOTE – the writer does not “totally” disagree, so the last sentence admits that globalisation can affect a culture, but this change is not necessarily bad.

 

BODY PARAGRAPH 2

  1. Main supporting idea 2 (link from BP1)

“Moreover, although it is true that people might follow similar fashion trends and consume the same kinds of entertainment, these trends can be influenced by cultures all over the world.”

  1. Explain

“Fashion designers and music producers increasingly look to different cultures for new ideas and creations.”

  1. Specific example or further analysis (remember to include at least one example per essay)

“Although these new globalised products are not always exactly reflective of the culture they came from, the internet allows people who are curious to search more about their background and understand more about the culture in which they originated.”

 

4. CONCLUSION

  1. Summarize your opinion and the reasons

“Globalisation might mean all humans have a shared “world” culture, but that means interesting or unique elements of all cultures can be highlighted rather than destroyed.”

  1. Memorable final statement supporting your view

“Humans are always looking for something new, and mass communication and globalisation encourages novelty rather than uniformity of culture.”

globalisation-2

 

FULL ESSAY

The ability to instantly communicate on a global scale has led to the phenomenon of globalisation where the world is becoming more inter-connected. While it is often claimed that this will unavoidably lead to the destruction of some cultures, I believe that it this is not entirely true.

People crave new experiences, so instead of destroying culture, the opening of the world makes the richness of different cultures more available for people to explore. It is only necessary to visit the central business district of a large city to see the wide range of restaurants serving different ethnic foods from all over the world to understand that different cultures have an important place in the world. While culture is about more than food and food even food can be changed from how it is in the traditional culture, it shows that globalisation can help aspects of different culture to thrive rather than perish.

Moreover, although it is true that people might follow similar fashion trends and consume the same kinds of entertainment, these trends can be influenced by cultures all over the world. Fashion designers and music producers, for example, increasingly look to different cultures for new ideas and creations. Although, these new globalised products are not always exactly reflective of the culture they came from, the internet allows people who are curious to search more about their background and understand more about the culture in which they originated.

Globalisation might mean all humans have a shared “world” culture, but that means interesting or unique elements of all cultures can be highlighted rather than destroyed. Humans are always looking for something new, and mass communication and globalisation encourages novelty rather than uniformity of culture. (290 words)

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