Band 9 Reports: Process – Making Concrete

The diagram below shows the stages in cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 102

INTRODUCTION

Paraphrase – “The diagram below shows the stages in cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.”

“shows” –> illustrates

“stages” –> steps involved in

“cement-making process” –> cement production

“produce” –> “manufacture”

“building purposes” –> construction purposes

SAMPLE – “The diagram illustrates the steps involved in cement production, and how cement is used to manufacture concrete for construction purposes.”

OVERVIEW

In this diagram, there are two clear processes. One is for making cement, and the other is for making concrete. Therefore, it is best to divide your body into TWO paragraphs with an overview for each

MAKING CEMENT – “[Overview sentence] The raw ingredients of cement are limestone and clay, which undergo several process in order to make cement. First, the limestone and clay is crushed into a powder and then put through a mixer. Next, the limestone-clay powder is sent through a rotating heater which turns the powder as it is heated. Finally, the powder is ground even finer and then poured into large bags to be sold.”

MAKING CONCRETE – “[Overview sentence] In order to produce concrete, cement and some other materials are combined in specific proportions inside a large machine called a concrete mixer. Half of the mixture is gravel, while a quarter is sand, and 15% is cement. The remaining 10% is water to help bind everything together. The mixer churns the concrete until it has an even consistency and can then be used for various kinds of construction.

COMMENTS –

  1. Remember to link each stage with different vocabulary
  2. If you don’t know a word, just ask yourself, is the thing “put in” or “sent through” or “mixed with” then add in the unknown word using passive voice. For example, if you don’t know what “limestone” or “clay” is, you can just write “Limestone and clay and put through a crusher which breaks them down into smaller pieces”
  3. Add the reason for each stage if you can. For example, the “mixer”must be to combine the crushed clay and limestone.
  4. If you can, try to add some advanced vocabulary like “churns” and “even consistency”

Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 102

FULL ANSWER

The diagram illustrates the steps involved in cement production, and how cement is used to manufacture concrete for construction purposes.

The raw ingredients of cement are limestone and clay, which undergo several process in order to make cement. First, the limestone and clay is crushed into a powder and then put through a mixer. Next, the limestone-clay powder is sent through a rotating heater which turns the powder as it is heated. Finally, the powder is ground even finer and then poured into large bags to be sold

In order to produce concrete, cement and some other materials are combined in specific proportions inside a large machine called a concrete mixer. Half of the mixture is gravel, while a quarter is sand, and 15% is cement. The remaining 10% is water to help bind everything together. The mixer churns the concrete until it is totally mixed and can then be used for various kinds of construction. (160 words)

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