Band 9 Essays: Opinion – Road Safety

TOPIC – Some people think that improving road safety will only be possible by increasing the legal age limit for new drivers. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?


Opinion = Mostly disagree

NOTE – In an opinion essay (agree or disagree), you can 100% agree or 100% disagree or have any view in between. In this essay, the view is mostly disagree. Therefore, there will be ONE body paragraph for the “agree” idea and TWO body paragraphs for the “disagree” side.


INTRODUCTION – Paraphrase the topic and clearly state your view. Aim for two sentences only. Don’t spend too long on your introduction. Just make the TOPIC and your VIEW clear. Most of your marks will come from a strong body with well-developed ideas.

TOPIC – Some people think that improving road safety will only be possible by increasing the legal age limit for new drivers. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

SAMPLE – “Road injuries and even deaths are a major source of concern in countries all around the globe. While many believe that the best approach to greater road safety is to raise the minimum age that individuals can obtain a license, there are more effective ways to make the road a safer place for everyone.”

NOTE – Sentence 1 gives the topic (road safety) and sentence 2 gives the writer’s opinion with some balance from the opposing side. Also, remember to use synonyms. In this example, “raise” is used instead of “increasing” and “minimum age” is used instead of “legal age limit”. Remember to also try to use general academic vocabulary. In this example, “obtain” is used instead of “get”.


BODY – This example will have THREE body paragraphs. Each paragraph should have: (1) a clear main idea (2) explanation of the idea (3) further explanation or a specific example. Remember to link all paragraphs with suitable linking words and phrases.

SAMPLE – “Those who believe the age limit for getting a licensed should be elevated believe that young people are too inexperienced to drive safely. Generally, if someone is only 16 when they get their license, they are still immature and may act recklessly and cause an accident while they are driving. However, it is unclear how much young people contribute to road accidents, so maybe it is not fair to cast all the blame on them.”

“On the other hand, it is clear that there are a range of other factors that reduce road safety. One of the biggest is simply inattentive drivers of all ages. With the advent of mobile phones, drivers are often distracted by checking their messages or their GPS, and this lack of focus on the road in front of them is a major cause of accidents. Similarly, people often drive while fatigued or under the influence of drugs or alcohol, which all reduce reaction time and magnify the risk of a driving error.”

“The best way to improve road safety is to not have people in charge of controlling vehicles that travel at high speed and can cause destruction in the blink of an eye. As technology advances, self-driving cars are only just around the corner, and only once computer algorithms rather than people are in charge of vehicles will road safety improve.”

NOTE – The first paragraph explains a view from the other side and also challenges it (see the last sentence). The second paragraph introduces a view for the writer’s position and supports it with some explanation and examples. There is also a range of vocabulary, such as “lack of focus” vs. “inattentive” vs. “distracted”. There is also some topic-specific vocabulary like “reaction time” and “driver error”. The third paragraph presents the writer’s answer to road safety (as opposed to raising the driving age limit). The writer also uses some relevant idioms like “in the blink of an eye” and “just around the corner”. There is also some advanced vocabulary like “computer algorithms”.

CONCLUSION – State your view. Summarize your main points and try to finish with something memorable or a possible answer to the problem.

SAMPLE – “Overall, it is clear that a lack of road safety is due to much more than just young drivers. People of all ages can make errors on the road for a variety of reasons, and the best way to make the roads safe is to eliminate the human factor.”

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