BAND 9.0 Essays: Problems and Solutions – Too Many Cars

Some people believe that international car-free days are an effective way to reduce air pollution. However, others argue that there are other ways that are more effective. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Car Pollution

STEP-BY-STEP GUIDE

NOTE – advanced vocabulary and synonyms are in bold. Linking vocabulary is in italics.

Step 1 – introduction

TIPS – your introduction should do TWO things (i) Introduce the topic (ii) Explain your plan (in this example, your plan is to compare banning cars with other options)

(i)  Polluted air is one of, if not the most, serious issues facing the world today. (ii) It has been suggested that to combat this problem, there should be days where cars are banned from the road. However, it is also commonly stated that air pollution can be addressed more effectively through other methods.

Car Pollution 2

Step 2 – Body Paragraph 1

TIPS – (i) State a view about cars and pollution (ii) Explain how they cause pollution (iii) Conclude that banning cars could therefore be an effective solution)

(i) It is certainly true that private vehicles are a major source of air pollution. (ii) Cars produce harmful emissions, such as carbon monoxide, that lead to a range of health problems and are responsible for the deaths of millions of people around the world every year. (iii) Therefore, it seems obvious that reducing the number of vehicles at any one time will help to make the air cleaner.

Step 3 – Body Paragraph 2

TIPS – (i) State some problems with the first solution i.e. people need to be able to move around easily (ii) Suggest another option and explain its effects (iii) Introduce another option (iv) Explain why it would be a good solution to the problem

(i) Nevertheless, it is also true people need some form of transportation, especially as ease of travel is necessary for economic productivity. (ii) One alternative to prohibiting cars is to increase the amount of public transportation, which would result in fewer vehicles and less air pollution. (iii) Another option is to make care more environmentally friendly. (iv) New technology, like cars powered by electricity or one that produce substantially fewer toxic substances, could help to decrease pollution, while still allowing people to use their own vehicles.

Car Pollution 1

Step 4 – Conclusion

TIPS – (i) State the problem has different solutions (ii) Summarize the options and their possible effectiveness

(i) Overall, dealing with the problem of air pollution requires a range of solutions. (ii) Reducing the number of vehicles on the road by restricting car usage is one possibility, but adding more public transport and making cars produce less pollution are also appropriate actions to take.

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FULL SAMPLE ANSWER

Polluted air is one of, if not the most, serious issues facing the world today. It has been suggested that to combat this problem, there should be days where cars are banned from the road. However, it is also commonly stated that air pollution can be addressed more effectively through other methods.

It is certainly true that private vehicles are a major source of air pollution. Cars produce harmful emissions, such as carbon monoxide, that lead to a range of health problems and are responsible for the deaths of millions of people around the world every year. Therefore, it seems obvious that reducing the number of vehicles at any one time will help to make the air cleaner.

Nevertheless, it is also true people need some form of transportation, especially as ease of travel is necessary for economic productivity. One alternative to prohibiting cars is to increase the amount of public transportation, which would result in fewer vehicles and less air pollution. Another option is to make care more environmentally friendly. New technology, like cars powered by electricity or one that produce substantially fewer toxic substances, could help to decrease pollution, while still allowing people to use their own vehicles.

Overall, dealing with the problem of air pollution requires a range of solutions. Reducing the number of vehicles on the road by restricting car usage is one possibility, but adding more public transport and making cars produce less pollution are also appropriate actions to take (253 words)

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