BAND 9.0 Essays – Discuss: Sharing of Knowledge

TOPIC – Some people believe that knowledge from the scientific field, business, and the academic world should be shared freely. Others think this knowledge should be controlled. Discuss both views then give your opinion.

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STRUCTURE
  1. Introduction – (i) paraphrase the topic. Try to add some synonyms for words like “Scientific field” and “academic world”. If you can’t, try to change the grammatical structure. (ii) State your plan i.e. discuss both views then give your opinion.
  2. One paragraph for views for one side. Remember to cover ALL parts of the question. This means you should try to think of ideas that apply to science, business, and academia.
  3. One paragraph for the opposite view. You might have fewer ideas for one side than the other. That’s okay. Try to think of some counterarguments for your ideas in the first paragraph or include a specific example to expand on your ideas.
  4. Conclusion – Summarise both sides then give your view (don’t forget to say what you think!)

NOTE – Advanced vocabulary and synonyms are included in bold.

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INTRODUCTION – Many people hold the view that the free exchange of information and ideas in the fields of science, business, and academia is the best way forward for society as a whole. Conversely, others hold the view that some knowledge holds too much importance or value to be shared for free. This essay will attempt to highlight the views for each position and then offer a conclusion.

SIDE ONE – On the one hand, sharing knowledge freely helps people to innovate and develop new technologies. In relation to science, if new discoveries are kept secret then there is no way for other scientists to test new ideas and understand what is real and what is fantasy. A similar argument can be made in the academic sphere which is built on the idea of sharing knowledge. If knowledge is not shared, then there is no way to test people’s claims and advance our collective knowledge of ourselves and the universe. As for business, allowing knowledge to be exchanged without restriction can help companies to develop new and better products instead of wasting time and money on developing things that might have already been created.

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OTHER SIDE – On the other hand, it is certainly true that the main goal of business in our current culture is to make a profit and sharing ideas may simply help a company’s competition and, therefore, affect their bottom line. Similarly, there are often commercial applications for knowledge that emerges in science and academia, and these often have massive monetary value.

CONCLUSION – Broadly speaking, sharing knowledge can help the progress of all humankind, while controlling who has access to knowledge generally helps those with access to it to profit from it at the expense of those who are left in the dark.

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FULL SAMPLE ANSWER

Many people hold the view that the free exchange of information and ideas in the fields of science, business, and academia is the best way forward for society as a whole. Conversely, others hold the view that some knowledge holds too much importance or value to be shared for free. This essay will attempt to highlight the views for each position and then offer a conclusion.

On the one hand, sharing knowledge freely helps people to innovate and develop new technologies. In relation to science, if new discoveries are kept secret then there is no way for other scientists to test new ideas and understand what is real and what is fantasy. A similar argument can be made in the academic sphere which is built on the idea of sharing knowledge. If knowledge is not shared, then there is no way to test people’s claims and advance our collective knowledge of ourselves and the universe. As for business, allowing knowledge to be exchanged without restriction can help companies to develop new and better products instead of wasting time and money on developing things that might have already been created.

On the other hand, it is certainly true that the main goal of business in our current culture is to make a profit and sharing ideas may simply help a company’s competition and, therefore, affect their bottom line. Similarly, there are often commercial applications for knowledge that emerges in science and academia, and these often have massive monetary value.

Broadly speaking, sharing knowledge can help the progress of all humankind, while controlling who has access to knowledge generally helps those with access to it to profit from it at the expense of those who are left in the dark. (288 words)

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SIMILAR ESSAYS

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BAND 9.0 Problem and Solutions Essay – Obesity in Children

Nowadays, the number of obese children is increasing at an alarming rate. What are some of the causes of this increase and how can the problem be solved?

GENERAL THINGS TO REMEMBER

  1. For this type of essay, you should try to think of TWO causes and then TWO solutions which might help to solve the causes you have identified (try to make sure the causes/effects and solutions are related!)
  2. Your essay structure should be something like – (1) Intro (2) Cause 1 (3) Cause 2 (4) Solutions x2 [in 1 or 2 paragraphs] (5) A brief conclusion

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TOPIC – Nowadays, the number of obese children is increasing at an alarming rate. What are some of the causes of this increase and how can the problem be solved?

  1. INTRODUCTION
TIPS – Aim for 2-3 sentences. You need to paraphrase the topic and then tell the reader your plan (discuss the causes then offer some solutions)

The number of children who are suffering from obesity can be said to have reached epidemic proportions. So, what are the factors behind this obesity epidemic, and how can it be brought under control. This essay will attempt to answer these pressing questions.

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2. CAUSES

TIPS – Try to make your main idea/topic sentence clear. Then explain to the reader any extra information they might need. Always remember to try to include one specific example in your body (even if you have to make it up!)

Firstly, it seems that a significant amount of blame can be given to poor diet combined with the marketing of unhealthy food toward young people. Children’s diets often consist of junk food, such as potato chips and candy, which is not only low in nutrients but also high in calories. This dietary issue is also compounded by the fact that these kinds of food are often marketed directly at children with fun cartoon mascots and bright colours that are designed to attract children’s attention.

Another undeniable reason is sedentary lifestyle. Children in the modern world tend to lead lives that are shockingly inactive compared to their predecessors. Much of their time is spent sitting in front of a screen, whether it be television, a computer, or a smartphone. In fact, studies have shown that children in urban environments tend to get only two hours of exercise per week compared to two hours per day just a generation ago.

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3. SOLUTIONS

TIPS – Notice how the solutions match the causes/try to solve the problems that come from the causes. You can introduce your “solutions” paragraph with a transition sentence like below. You can use this kind of sentence for ANY topic.

Nevertheless, through concerted action by parents and governments, this worrying situation can be alleviated. In terms of diet, parents need to play a greater role in controlling what their children eat. For the government’s part, they can introduce legislation restricting the promotion of unhealthy food to children. Similarly, parents need to make a greater effort to ensure their children are getting sufficient exercise on a daily basis, while the government can launch some kind of ‘stay active’ health campaigns.

4. CONCLUSION

TIPS – Say why this problem is a serious one. End with how your solutions can lead to a better world!

Overall, the rise in the number of obese children is certainly worrying, especially and kids are a vulnerable part of the population. However, by taking some simple practical steps, we can help to make sure that the next generation grows up healthy and strong.

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FULL SAMPLE ANSWER – BAND 9.0

The number of children who are suffering from obesity can be said to have reached epidemic proportions. So, what are the factors behind this obesity epidemic, and how can it be brought under control. This essay will attempt to answer these pressing questions.

Firstly, it seems that a significant amount of blame can be given to poor diet combined with the marketing of unhealthy food toward young people. Children’s diets often consist of junk food, such as potato chips and candy, which is not only low in nutrients but also high in calories. This dietary issue is also compounded by the fact that these kinds of food are often marketed directly at children with fun cartoon mascots and bright colours that are designed to attract children’s attention.

Another undeniable reason is sedentary lifestyle. Children in the modern world tend to lead lives that are shockingly inactive compared to their predecessors. Much of their time is spent sitting in front of a screen, whether it be television, a computer, or a smartphone. In fact, studies have shown that children in urban environments tend to get only two hours of exercise per week compared to two hours per day just a generation ago.

Nevertheless, through concerted action by parents and governments, this worrying situation can be alleviated. In terms of diet, parents need to play a greater role in controlling what their children eat. For the government’s part, they can introduce legislation restricting the promotion of unhealthy food to children. Similarly, parents need to make a greater effort to ensure their children are getting sufficient exercise on a daily basis, while the government can launch some kind of ‘stay active’ health campaigns.

Overall, the rise in the number of obese children is certainly worrying, especially and kids are a vulnerable part of the population. However, by taking some simple practical steps, we can help to make sure that the next generation grows up healthy and strong.

If you have any questions or comments, feel free to post them!

MORE SAMPLE ANSWERS FOR SIMILAR ESSAY TYPES

BAND 9.0 Essays: Problems and Solutions – Too Many Cars

Band 9 Essays: Writing Introductions – Fat Kids

IELTS Task 1 Writing: Mixed Task – Bar Chart and Line Graph

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The charts above show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

Write a report of at least 150 words describing the information shown.

GENERAL THINGS TO REMEMBER

Your report should have – (1) An introduction that paraphrases the information you given about the graph (“The chart shows…” etc.) (2) An overview that reports the main details (overall trends, highs, lows, etc.) (3) 1-2 body paragraphs that expand on the main ideas and provide supporting data.

EASY ANSWER

The following is an answer in the 6+ IELTS band range.

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  1. INTRODUCTION

The charts above show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

EXAMPLE – The charts above give information about the amount of tourist from Japan travelling overseas between 1985 and 1995 as well as Australia’s Japanese tourist market share.

TIPS – There are always some words you can change using common synonyms. For example, “show(s)” can always be changed to something like “indicate(s)” or “give(s) information”. You can also change the grammatical structure. In this example, “Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market” has been changed to “Australia’s Japanese tourist market share”

2. OVERVIEW

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2-3 OVERVIEW (MAIN FEATURES) AND BODY (SUPPORTING DATA)

The overview is the first sentence of each of the following body paragraphs. You MUST include an overview, which is a summary of the main details. Normally, this is the overall trend, or the biggest (smallest) figures. What do you notice first when you look at the charts?

A quick glance at the first chart reveals that the number of Japanese people traveling abroad increased significantly over the period. In 1985, there were about 5 million Japanese tourists travelling to other countries. However, over the next five years, this number more than doubled to around 11 million. After that, there was a small drop of a few hundred thousand in the next year, but then tourist numbers continued to climb again, finishing in 1995 at just over 15 million.

Similarly, the line graph shows that more and more Japanese tourists chose Australia as their holiday destination. Only 2 percent of Japanese tourists visited Australia in 1985, but this number had risen to almost 5 percent by 1988. Although in the next year, the percentage dipped to just above 4 percent, it climbed after that to over 6 percent in 1993. Finally, there was a small fall to 6 percent in the last year given in the graph. (185 words)

TIPS – A good answer is one where the reader can picture or “see” what the graph/chart looks like based on your description. Try reading some sample answers and then drawing the chart. If you can draw a decent outline, then you’ve probably read/written a good report.

 

HIGH-LEVEL ANSWER

Line Graph - Tourists

The bar chart provides data relating to the quantity of Japanese citizens travelling to foreign holiday destinations over the decade from 1985 to 1995, while the line graph presents the percentage of these tourists who chose Australia as their travel destination during the same interval.

A cursory examination of the bar chart reveals a substantial increase in the overall number of tourists coming out of Japan. In the initial year of the chart, Japanese tourist numbers stood at approximately 5 million. However, over the following five years, this figure increased by more than two times to roughly 11 million. Despite a minimal dip of a few hundred thousand in 1991, tourist numbers continued to climb, ending the period at just over 15 million.

A similar upward trend can be seen in the percentage of Japanese people embarking on a holiday to Australia. In 1985, Australia was the travel location of only 2 percent of Japanese, but this figure increased dramatically to almost 5 percent over the next three years. Australia’s share of Japanese tourist dipped to just over 4 percent in the next year, but then rebounded and had grown to over 6 percent by 1993. Although there was another drop in the final year given in the graph, the percentage of Japanese tourists visiting Australia was still three times greater than it had been at the beginning. (225 words)

TIPS – In the advanced answer there are (1) a wide range of advanced vocabulary (e.g. “rebounded”, “a cursory examination” (2) A wide range of grammatical structures (including a mix of clauses and tense – simple past vs. past perfect (3) A wide range of linking vocabulary (4) A range of synonyms for reporting the subject of the charts (“Japanese tourists travelling overseas”)

IF YOU HAVE ANY QUESTIONS OR COMMENTS, FEEL FREE TO POST THEM!

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SPEAKING PART 1 – Your Studies

GENERAL THINGS TO REMEMBER

Part 1 is like a casual ‘getting-to-know-you’ conversation. Imagine you are talking to someone you’ve just met in a coffee shop.

THEREFORE, don’t worry about advanced vocabulary or idioms. IN FACT, misusing idioms can be worse than just speaking simply and clearly.

AIM to speak for three sentences. SPEAK about yourself. SPEAK confidently and naturally (like you’re catching up with an old friend) and you will do your BEST!

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SAMPLE ANSWERS

The following questions are some of the most common in relation to the topic of “STUDIES” in IELTS Speaking Part 1. Each question has two samples. REMEMBER, there is no such thing as a “wrong” answer. As long as you answer the question directly, speak clearly, and talk about yourself, you’ll be FINE!

 

  1. WHAT DO YOU STUDY?

At the moment, I’m studying accounting. It’s my major as part of my commerce degree. I’m in my third year, so I’ll graduate at the end of next year.

Right now, I’m not studying anything in particular – I’m getting ready to go abroad and study a business management degree. For the past few months, I’ve just been studying IELTS to get ready as well as complete all the requirements for studying abroad.

  1. WHERE DO YOU STUDY?

My university is called the University of Studies. It’s quite a well-respected university. It offers degrees in a range of subject, but most students go there to study something related to finance or business.

I’ve just graduated from high school, and in a few months I’ll start university. I haven’t actually picked which one I’ll study at – it depends on which one I can get into!

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  1. WHY DID YOU CHOOSE THAT SUBJECT?

I chose to studying finance on the advice of my parents. They suggested that it would be a useful degree for finding a good job. I guess it’s true, but I can’t say I enjoy it that much.

I’ve always dreamed of being a doctor, so medicine was the obvious choice for me. Actually, I couldn’t just choose this subject. I had to get really good grades, and even then I think I was lucky to get accepted.

  1. DO YOU LIKE THAT SUBJECT?

Like I said before, I don’t really enjoy it that much. I know it is a sensible subject to study, but it’s just so boring. It’s all numbers and tables, and sometimes it all seems the same. I guess if I can find a well-paying job, it’ll be okay.

As I said in the last question, it’s been my dream since I was little to be a doctor, so I definitely like my major. Sometimes, the workload can seem overwhelming, but I know it’ll be worth it when I get my medical degree and I can start helping people as a real doctor.

TIPS – When you mention something in an answer that you might’ve said earlier, then show the examiner this by using phrases like, “Like I said before” or “As I mentioned earlier”. This helps to make your speaking more connected and is also how you speak in a REAL conversation!

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  1. IS IT A POPULAR SUBJECT IN YOUR COUNTRY?

Definitely. Accounting is maybe one of the most popular subjects. As my country’s economy develops, office jobs, especially ones with a good salary are in demand. Most of my friends are studying something finance-related and they hope to work for a foreign company because those ones tend to pay the most!

Actually, graphic design is only just starting to become popular in my country, and even a few years ago it was hard to find a good course to take about design – apart from something traditional like architecture. When I tell people what I’m studying, they often seem surprised and want to know why I’m not studying a more useful subject.

TIPS – When you have an extra idea to add (like above with “–apart from something traditional like architecture”, just add it casually like you would in a conversation (kind of like a bullet point or afterthought) as this is more like the natural flow of conversation.

  1. WOULD YOU LIKE TO STUDY SOMETHING DIFFERENT?

I would love to study fashion design if I could study whatever I wanted. However, my parents say that is a job that only a few people are successful at and so it’s not a smart choice. I think I might study it after I’ve graduated and have some more money.

I’ve always been interested in space, but my marks for science subjects, especially physics, have always been really bad, so I don’t know if I’m smart enough to study that. However, I still read a lot about it, so maybe I don’t need to study it directly if I can still enjoy it like I do now.

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  1. DO YOU PLAN TO GET A JOB IN THE SAME FIELD AS YOUR SUBJECT?

I think so. With an accounting degree, there are lots of possible places to find a job, so I think it’s the smartest choice. However, after I get some experience, I might look for a different job or a management position. I don’t really want to be an accountant my whole life.

Of course. I think almost everyone who does a medical degree ends up being a doctor. A few of my friends who are studying medicine have thought about working in the pharmaceutical industry, but I’ve got my mind set on becoming a surgeon.

TIPS – Don’t worry about idioms in Part 1. They are often misused and make your speaking sound unnatural. However, you can still use some advanced vocabulary (see “pharmaceutical industry” and “got my mind set on”). REMEMBER to always try and say things you would say in a casual conversation.

  1. HOW MUCH TIME DO YOU SPEND STUDYING?

I would say a few hours every day. Actually, I thought university would be much more time-consuming than high school, but I have to study so much back then to prepare for my university entrance exams, that university life is not too bad in comparison.

I have to study a lot. Law is known for being a subject with a heavy workload. There are so many cases to remember and you need to work hard on your reasoning and critical thinking skills. It’s nice when exams are over and I have a little bit of time to relax.

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