IELTS Essays (Basic to Band 9): Causes and Solutions – YOUTH CRIME

Youth Crime 3

Children and teenagers are committing more and more crimes in many countries. Why is this happening? How can we stop or at least reduce youth crime?

THINGS TO REMEMBER

(1) For the Task Response part of this essay, you should aim for TWO reasons and TWO possible solutions that deal with the reasons you have identified.

(2) For the Coherence and Cohesion part of the essay, you can use a 4-5 paragraph structure. In the simple sample below, the structure is (i) Introduction (ii) Reason 1 (iii) Reason 2 (iv) Solutions (v) Conclusion. In the advanced (Band) essay below, the structure is (i) Introduction (ii) Reason 1 + Solution (iii) Reason 2 + Solution (iv) Conclusion.

(3) For the Lexical Resource (vocabulary) part of the essay, aim to use synonyms for the key parts of the essay prompt – “Children and teenagers” –> “young people” “youth”, “many countries” –> “around the world” “this is a global issue”, “more and more” –> “a rising number” “increasing” etc. ALSO, make sure you use synonyms for repeated parts in your essay i.e. “solutions” “reasons” etc.

NOTE – The following contains two sample answers: a simple one and an advanced one. The simple one has some keywords (linking words and synonyms) included in bold. The advanced version is written at a Band 9 level.
Youth Crime 1
SAMPLE ESSAY ONE (Basic)

Children and teenagers are committing more and more crimes in many countries. Why is this happening? How can we stop or at least reduce youth crime?

In a lot of countries around the world, an increasing number of crimes are being committed by young people. This essay will look at the reasons for this trend and then offer some ways to stop or decrease the amount of crime committed by youth.

One of the main causes of youth crime is a negative family environment. Some children and teenagers do not have a happy life at home and this leads them to do some actions that are not socially acceptable for attention or because they have never learned right from wrong. For example, if there parents are always working, a young person might shoplift and even hope they get caught so that there parents will be forced to give them some attention.

Another major reason is pressure in their social or school life. Children and teenagers are under a lot of pressure to succeed, and committing small crimes can be a way to get some excitement and even feel in control of their life. This is supported by the fact that many children commit pointless crimes like vandalism or shoplifting useless items that are just done for fun.

To reduce or even eliminate youth crime, we need to focus of young people’s lives at home and at school. At home, parents need to pay more attention to what there children are doing and how they are feeling as they grow up and experience many new changes. Moreover, children need to be encouraged to study and learn what they are good at so that they feel confident about their futures.

Overall, the rise in youth crime can be linked to factors at home and at school. Nevertheless, despite these problems, there are some ways to deal with them that focus on the reasons why young people decide to commit crimes. (301 words)

Youth Crime 2
SAMPLE ESSAY TWO – ADVANCED (BAND 9)

Children and teenagers are committing more and more crimes in many countries. Why is this happening? How can we stop or at least reduce youth crime?

It is an alarming fact that the youth crime rate is growing in many places around the globe and is a phenomenon that needs to be addressed. However, before solutions can be offered, it is necessary to look at the underlying causes of the increase in youth-perpetrated crime.

The underlying root of the problem is almost always a young person’s home life. Irrespective of socio-economic status, if a youth’s family environment is chaotic, violent, or simply lacking in attention, then that youth may act out by committing petty crimes in a desperate cry for attention. To deal with this, parents must take the responsibility to find the time in their own busy lives to make sure that their children are not only looked after physically but have their emotional needs taken care of too.

Another factor may be the general environment that children grow up in nowadays. In other words, the youth of today spend most of their time interacting online, which means a lack of face-to-face interaction with other people, resulting possibly in a lack of empathy for others and so a greater willingness to commit crimes, like vandalism, graffiti, or shoplifting, which show a lack of respect for other people’s property. A practical measure that could be taken on this front is to encourage, or eve require, children to participate in more social activities, like sports and other clubs.

Overall, while the escalation in crimes undertaken by young people is a concerning trend, by focusing on improving the quality of a young person’s home life as well as helping them grow as people by aiding the development of their social skills, the problem can be considerably diminished, if not altogether eliminated. (283 words)

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